1. This excellent, punchy with a whiff of mystery. That last stanza is a particularly fitting finale.

    The only line I would rework is blankly staring, not only because a ‘blank stare’ as such is a received phrase, but also because – to my mind – exactly this is the phrase and image the poem hinges on. The more eye-catching the image therefore, the stronger the poem. But other than that, great stuff.

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